Reflecting on the first and final drafts of Project 3, I would say this is where I spent much time focused on the global and the local revisions. The process of project 3 was made up of 3 different drafts followed by the final draft. I chose to focus on the 1200-word draft as I this was the point just prior to the peer review stage. Comparing the 1200-word draft to my final draft, the most notable change that I had made was paragraph structure. As seen in screenshot #1, the first and second body paragraphs of my 1200-word draft, both span an entire page. This was an issue that I constantly felt myself running into when trying to work in multiple authors into a paragraph as well as my own thoughts. But looking at those same paragraphs in the final draft (screenshot #2), there are much needed breaks in the paper. During the peer review process, one of my peers had suggested that I used block quotations on quotes longer than 40 words. While this does not remove any necessary information, including the block quotes into my paper made it much more visually appealing and overall easier to read. Looking further down to my third body paragraph there is the start to a new thought (screenshot #3). Prior to the peer review my plan was to incorporate only one of my peers into the paragraph and then provide where I stand. But after discussing that with my peer review group, I felt it to be crucial to include a paragraph where I bring my two peers into conversation with myself. I was able to bring them into conversation separately with Sam Anderson but did not see how I could make the two peers work together. Looking at the third body paragraph of my final draft (screenshot #4) I feel as though I was able to successfully bring them into conversation with one another. I selected two quotes from each essay that allows for one to explain the other all while furthering the overall argument about technology. Thinking locally, my 1200-word draft required much attention. In the 1200-word draft I would find myself being too wordy saying things like “more and more people are suffering” as opposed to “more and more people suffer” and I at one point left an introduction to a quote from Kaia in a paragraph where I used Myli as a source. This was a simple mistake caused by me shifting around my quotes and one that I probably would not have noticed if it weren’t for the peer review.  

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